How to make a paragraph from your outline:

1.  Begin with an appropriate transition word.

First,

2.  Write ONE SEPARATE sentence for the main idea of the paragraph (shopping).

            First, I prefer the city because it has the best shopping.

*****DO NOT combine this sentence with any of the details!

WRONG:  First, I prefer the city because it has the best department stores.

WRONG:  First, I prefer the city because it has the best shopping, such as the best department stores.

WRONG:  First, I prefer the city because it has the best shopping, such as the best department stores, designer fashions, and more choices.

RIGHT:  First, I prefer the city because it has the best shopping.

3.  Write ONE SEPARATE sentence for each detail.  You may combine the secondary details into the same sentence, or they may be a separate sentence.

First, I prefer the city because it has the best shopping.  For example, the city has the best department stores, such as Macy’s in NYC and Harrods in London.  You can also buy designer clothing such as Gucci and Versace in the city.  Finally, the city offers more choices because you can buy goods from all over the world. 

4.  If you are able, try to write a concluding sentence that sums up the main idea of the paragraph (this is optional and not always necessary):

First, I prefer the city because it has the best shopping.  For example, the city has the best department stores, such as Macy’s in NYC and Harrods in London.  You can also buy designer clothing such as Gucci and Versace in the city.  Finally, the city offers more choices because you can buy goods from all over the world.  The city is the only place where one can find such fine quality goods and such a variety of products.

Your completed paragraph would look like this:

First, I prefer the city because it has the best shopping.  For example, the city has the best department stores, such as Macy’s in NYC and Harrods in London.  You can also buy designer clothing such as Gucci and Versace in the city.  Finally, the city offers more choices because you can buy goods from all over the world.  The city is the only place where one can find such fine quality goods and such a variety of products.

A much simpler paragraph, without the additional details, would look like this:

            First, I prefer the city because it has the best shopping.  For example, the city has the best department stores.  You can also buy designer clothing in the city.  Finally, the city offers a better selection of goods than the countryside. 

This paragraph might receive a lower score for language use, but it would still be clear and well-organized.